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Many minority languages are disappearing around the world. What are the causes of this phenomenon? What measures can be taken to preserve these languages?

Some
people
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 think that more and more
minority
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languages
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 are going extinct all over the world.
This
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 to native
languages
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 and the adoption of international
languages
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 have led to an increase in
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 trend, and some measures
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 as
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government incentives like free education and social awareness campaigns promoting individualities can help to preserve these
languages
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. One of the main causes for the disappearance of
minority
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languages
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 is that
people
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 do not give preference to their mother tongue.
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 is because they believe that their perspective
language
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 would not benefit them in many manners, as it would not be used in any phase of life. Another reason for the extinction is the adoption of worldwide spoken
languages
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.
People
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 tend to adopt
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languages
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 because they prove to be advantageous to them for their international usage and preference.
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, English is an international
language
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 which is given priority all around the world,
therefore
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people
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 prioritize its usage which results in the disappearance of
minority
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languages
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.
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, societies can step forward to aware
people
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 the identical
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 of
languages
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 through campaigns.
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 to say that
people
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 should be made aware of the
importance
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 of their cultural
language
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, as it individualizes them from the other parts of society and gives them separate
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.
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, the authorities can take the initiative by providing free of cost education that could result in preserving a minor
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.
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, recently,
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 government is giving preference to French, as it is their
minority
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language
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, and they are taking measures to increase its
importance
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 by providing free education to
people
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.
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, helping to preserve less spoken
language
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. In conclusion, preferring international
language
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 and giving minor
importance
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 to native
language
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 are some of the reasons behind the disappearance of
minority
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languages
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. Measures
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 as awareness campaigns and inputs by the government can help to mitigate
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 scenario.

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