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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities. What are the possible causes & solutions ?

#people #neighbours #communities
In a fast moving world, human interactions with people are decreasing day by day due highly tense of
working culture
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working cultures
the working culture
.
This
 is because people
wants
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want
 to maintain privacy and confidentiality. There are two main possible causes of
this
 matter.
Firstly
 is
busy work
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a busy work schedule
schedule
 and tense working culture.
For instance
 construction engineers, most of
time
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the time
 they are working more than 10 hours in a day and not getting leave on
weekend
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the weekend
weekends
 due to the strict
schedule
.
Secondly people
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Secondly, people
 who are working in medical sector have not certain work
schedule
. Due to
this
 they cannot be enjoying his social life.
However there
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However, there
 are some solutions for
this
 matter. People have to be prepare
schedule
 for leisure time
in
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on
 weekends and start interactive with
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 and relatives. Government should
also
 make programs and encourage these type of function. So people can enjoy more.
To
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In
conclusion it
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conclusion, it
 is difficult to find time for
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 because of several factors still efforts must be made to create a bond as
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 are likely extended family and they are the ones who offer help in dreadful circumstances.
Submitted by Ajay Panchani on

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