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Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, some people argue that universities should give more attention to practical training rather than theoretical
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 throughout their courses. I especially agree with
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 statement and
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 essay will provide both situations. On the one hand, practical training can have various benefits for college
students
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 because it would make them more productive and remember faster
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 as experiments in the laboratory.
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, when becoming a college student, they might choose a career
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,
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 who have been training a lot would gain more experience that can deployed for attending their job in the future.
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, my sister studies in the faculty of art, and she said that professors in her classes usually train them to create artwork to become an artist in the future.
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, the university would provide more training on their main courses to make them have a better improvement.
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, theoretical
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 was required at every level of education and it has too much detail on it
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 as the theory of modern physics, gas, and electrical.
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, universities that mention too much
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theoretical that sometimes make it unnecessary for
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 to learn during their classes,
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, it might be difficult for pupils to remember all of the details and it can be boring for some people that not interested in it.
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, during my mathematics classes, the teacher always elaborated on how the theory or concept was developed
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 did the practice questions in the next class.
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, colleges should provide theoretical
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 that fits their student needs. In conclusion, I believe that universities should include more practical training in their courses, and give theoretical
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 appropriately to make their
students
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 more effective.

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clarity
Try to refine the way you express your ideas to make them clearer. For example, in the introduction, you mention that the essay will "provide both situations," but actually you mainly discuss the benefits of practical training and the drawbacks of too much theoretical knowledge. Make sure this is clear from the start.
support
Ensure examples directly support your arguments and are well-integrated into the essay. You mention your sister studying art and your own mathematics class, but these examples could be more clearly tied to the point you're making.
conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your points and aligns with your overall argument.
structure
The essay overall has a logical flow, and paragraphs are organized with a clear focus.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical training
  • balanced approach
  • real-world skills
  • foundation
  • apply knowledge
  • field of study
  • collaborate
  • industry
  • hands-on experience
  • employability
  • job readiness
  • interests
  • career goals
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