The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

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Obesity is growing threat of 21st century.

However

, giving some extra weights to activity related to sports and physical exercise at school to overcome the problem of obesity is at somehow possible.

However

, It is not the only way to fight against the problem. According to me there are many factors which play a vital role to combat

this

issue. The following essay I will discuss them in detail. At

first

, Beside exercise a good healthy diet is

also

important

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Nowadays children are having more and more junk food like pizza

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burger as well as chocolate items. These foods without nutrition only lead to increase bad fat in our body.In a recent

study

by Oxford university on children of age 16 or under they found some surprising result. The

study

shows that 6 out of 10 children are overweight. And the major reason is the food they consume. On the

second

hand, absence of outdoor activity and increase of indoor activity like playing video games and watching television

also

increase the risk of being obese. In a recent

study

by university of Toronto shows that children with both working parents are at more risk of child health issue. Because they don't give enough attention to their children.

Last

but not least, It is the responsibility of both parents as well as schools to take some extra care of their children by not limiting them in class

study

Moreover

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keep them educated about the benefits of a healthy diet and physical workout is

also

helping to curb

this

health issue.

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1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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obesity
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healthy eating habits
balanced meals
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parental involvement
community initiatives
fitness programs
government policies
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