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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of the noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some people think that there are benefits to find stringent laws to control the
noise
’s
amount
 which is allowed for each
person
 towards others while others think that there are downsides if there are strict laws to control what is the
amount
 of the
noise
 can people release in their surround. In
this
 essay I will discuss both sides of
this
 contentious argument and
then
 I will give my own perspective which is that the
amount
 of the
noise
 that individuals make should be controlled by inflexible laws. Some individuals argue that there are several advantages if the government presences stringent punishments about the loud
noise
 allowed from
person
Suggestion
people
the person
a person
. One of the advantages is that the laws will decrease the disturbance which occurs by the loud
noise
 and that keeps the health of people. Another advantage is to make the
neighbourhood quiet
Accept comma addition
neighbourhood, quiet
 offering peaceful environment for people to work, study, or relax after a long day. Others argue that there are some disadvantages for controlling the volume of the
noise
 which is a
person
 can make.
For instance
,
that is
 considered a form of violation of human rights in listening because human ears' sensitivity for sounds is different from
person
 to
person
, so there is difficult to find a perfect volume of sounds
that is
 considered a
noise
.
In other words
, the
amount
 of the
noise
 which annoys me, maybe it
is not bother
Suggestion
is not bothering
doesn't bother
does not bother
has not bothered
is not bothered
 my neighbour. In conclusion, I believe both sides of the argument have their merits.
However
, on balance I believe that the being of laws to control which is the
amount
 of the
noise
 a
person
 can make is essential; as I feel it will reduce the disturbance's issues
such
 as health problems as lack sleeping or general issues as decrease productivity whether in studying or working.
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