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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of the noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some people think that there are benefits to find stringent laws to control the
noise
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’s
amount
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 which is allowed for each
person
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 towards others while others think that there are downsides if there are strict laws to control what is the
amount
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 of the
noise
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 can people release in their surround. In
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 contentious argument and
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 I will give my own perspective which is that the
amount
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 of the
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 that individuals make should be controlled by inflexible laws. Some individuals argue that there are several advantages if the government presences stringent punishments about the loud
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 allowed from
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people
the person
a person
. One of the advantages is that the laws will decrease the disturbance which occurs by the loud
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 and that keeps the health of people. Another advantage is to make the
neighbourhood quiet
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neighbourhood, quiet
 offering peaceful environment for people to work, study, or relax after a long day. Others argue that there are some disadvantages for controlling the volume of the
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 which is a
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 considered a form of violation of human rights in listening because human ears' sensitivity for sounds is different from
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 to
person
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, so there is difficult to find a perfect volume of sounds
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 considered a
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.
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, the
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 of the
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 which annoys me, maybe it
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is not bothering
doesn't bother
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 my neighbour. In conclusion, I believe both sides of the argument have their merits.
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, on balance I believe that the being of laws to control which is the
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 of the
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 a
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 can make is essential; as I feel it will reduce the disturbance's issues
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 as health problems as lack sleeping or general issues as decrease productivity whether in studying or working.
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