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many people believe that is social networking sites(such as Facebook ) have had a huge negative impact in individuals and society . to what extent do you agree ?

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Social networking sites,
for instance
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Facebook
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, are thought by some to have had a detrimental
effect
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 on individual people as well as society and local communities.
However
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, while I believe that
such
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 sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging
effect
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 on local communities. With regards to individuals, the impact that online social media
has had
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have had
 on each has clear advantages.
Firstly
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, people from different countries are brought together through
such
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 sites as
Facebook
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 whereas before the development of technology and social networking sites, people rarely had the chance to meet or individual person anyone
outsde
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
 of their immediate circle or community.
Secondly
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,
Facebook
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also
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 has social groups which offer individuals a chance to
meet communicate
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meet, communicate
 with and participate in discussions with people who share common interests.
On the other hand
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, the
effect
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 that
Facebook
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 and other social networking sites have had on societies and local communities can only be seen as negative. Rather than individual people taking part in their local community, they are
instead
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 choosing to take more interest in people online.
Consequently
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, the people within local communities are no longer forming close or supportive relationships.
Furthermore
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, society as a whole is becoming increasingly disjointed and fragmented as people spend more time online with people they have never met face to face and who are unlikely to ever meet in the future. To conclude,
although
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 social networking sites have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same
effect
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 on society or local communities. Local communities should do more to try and involve local people in local activities in order to promote the future of community life.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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