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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead being put behind the bars To what extent do you agree?

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Making prisoners do
community
work
 serves a dual purpose, it works towards the betterment of the
community,
Suggestion
community, it also
also
 it gives an opportunity to the prisoners to contribute back to the
society
 and a chance for redemption. While I do agree the prisoners should be made to do unpaid
community
work
, there is
also
 the risk of exposing criminal to the
community
, creating an unmitigated risk factor.
Community
work
 helps the prisoners to be in touch with
community
Suggestion
the community
, rather than staying in isolation.
This
 would make their post prison life an easier transition, which would be helpful for both the criminal as well as the
community
. If the person stays in isolation or along with other prisoners all the time, the mental state of a person can be affected and it may detriment the good in him. There have been so many instances, where people cannot gel in with
community
 after being behind the bars for longer duration, due to their experiences in prison.
On the other hand
, exposure of
community
work
, would help the prisoner to be in touch with their sane side, but it
also
 acts as an unprecedented risk for the
community
. Few prisoners may take
this
 as an opportunity to escape, concurrently some might vent out their frustration on the
community
.
Similarly
, there is learning curve for the
society
 as well. While prisoners are working with the
community
, they shouldn't be treated with demeaning behaviour,
also
 people should not be scared, making them feel different. In conclusion,
community
work
 is a viable option, but it cannot be applied to all the prisoners, some can be actually dangerous to the
society
 and the ones that are selected should be put under strict measures, along with us as
society
 accepting it as a normal.
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