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The only way to improve safety and our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences what extent do you agree or disagree?

#safety #roads #punishments #offences
Safety on roads is
one
 of the biggest concerns in today's world. There are always accidents on the roads causing deaths of drivers and passengers. Sometimes, they are worst and death rate will be high. To avoid
this
, we must follow the road rules and governments should impose stricter punishments for driving offences. Some people argue that
this
 is not a way to make it work, but I don't agree with them and I will explain why in
this
 essay. Roads are the major way of transportation and everyday, everywhere there are millions of people travel on different types of vehicles. All governments implementing safety rules to make sure everyone on the road will reach their homes safely. Few drivers never take those rules seriously and creating life threatening situations to others. There are a number of incidents caused deaths on roads which are no
one
 deserved, just because of negligence and rash driving.
One
 day, my friend's family travelling on highway and a car with over speed hit them from the back side, killing his aunt and caused severe injuries to remain. The driver of that
speed
Suggestion
speeding
 car is drunken, he is injured very badly. In
this
 case,
one
 of their family members died without a reason. Implementing strict rules will be the biggest step to control these types of accidents. If any
one
 break rules, there should be a severe punishment which should make every driver afraid of disobeying the rules. Governments
also
 should educate people about road rules and the consequences if they break them. Frequent patrols on highways and drug tests will help to reduce the accidents, Taking and texting on phones while driving
also
 the biggest cause of the accidents.
One
 should aware, it is the most dangerous thing to do while driving. Governments are installing cameras to detect drivers operating phones while driving. To conclude, everyone should follow roads rules strictly, and drive safe to stop accidents on roads.
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