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Presently, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern era, people belong to big planet earth and the population of countries is increasing and the strength of younger people more than the older people. The youngest masses have more advantages than the number of older people. Now, I will discuss it is in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the junior folks are more talented than the oldest
generation
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 and they have more familiar with the latest technology. Older people have more knowledge about the world, but they do not open-minded as compared to the new
generation
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.
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, a few years ago, most of the parents do not allow their girls to go away from home for
the higher
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higher
 education and a job. Nowadays, the number of industry fast grows due to a new
generation
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 because they are spending more time finding new latest technology which helps to increase the economy of the country.
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, the young girls go-ahead these days as compared to boys. On the flip side, new generations have some drawbacks for their society because they do not have enough time to spend their family members, and they do not like to live in a joint family.
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, the youngest people are spending most of their time on using the internet on mobile phones and most of the younger children busy earning money at home with the help of the internet.
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, they do not close to their family members, and they spend a huge amount of their money on their fashionable things. In conclusion, it can be said that the new
generation
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 is necessary for the development and growth of the world, but its negative effect on society should not
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marginalize
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