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Individuals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. How far do you agree or disagree?

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Historically, a large number of changes and developments have been brought by governments and big organizations. Their actions have led that many people believe that individuals are incapable to become an
agents
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agent
 who can change the
society
. I do not agree with it completely. On the one hand, in the past all important issues were resolved by nation governments or powerful organizations. It was understandable and natural because most of the population was illiterate and conformists. Only
few people
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a few people
 had access to
full education
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a full education
. They usually came from the aristocratic family and could participate in the political life.
Such
 individuals had the power and the ability to make political decisions causing changes in
society
 for better or worse.
On the other hand
, there were many events in the 20th century that transformed the modern world. It was related to change of people's consciousness. Many people have realized that they were able to influence politics with their active actions, to have political, economic and social rights, thereby changing their lives and the whole situation in the country.
For example
, I would like to mention Mahatma Gandhi. He was an Indian political and social activist, as a leader and ideologist of the movement for peaceful change he fought for the independence of India from Great Britain. In conclusion,
although
 the governments lead and conduct reforms to improve the life of
society
, ordinary people should
also
 take an active part in the controlling of their activity.I do not think that persons are not able to develop
society
. For
this
 reason, I believe that both individuals and governments have their roles to influence or transform our community.
Therefore
, any persons as a member of governments or organizations can do something to improve social life.
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