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In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centers. What are advantages of such system and do you think this is something that most cities should adopt.

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Nowadays we can face up to
such
 phenomena as banning private cars from city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
, especially in big cities. Obviously, there is the question which should be answered: what are advantages of
this
 method?
This
 essay will consider some pros regarding
such
 system. These days using a private car
has become
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had become
 as a new trend.
However
, statistics show that in
developed
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developing
 countries a family has a chance to own more than two cars. Obviously, it is an opportunity to reach a destination in comfort that people adore and appreciate a lot.
As a result
, a large number of cars cause traffic jams;
in
addition many
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addition, many
 accidents occur on a daily basis because of a lot of vehicles.
Thus
, so called banned method can be used in order to avoid the problems considered above.
Furthermore
, I strongly believe that
such
 system should be adopted in every big city, with the exception of public transport. The method seems to be the best way to
except
consider or hold as true
accept
expect
 traffic jams.
Moreover
, using a car during rush hour is not effective at all. Fortunately, nowadays public transportation is developed and everyone can catch a modern bus or a train as easy as never before.
In other words
,
such
 relevant solution can be very useful in some big cities and the government should consider
this
 system. It is acceptable in some countries to ban private cars from certain areas
such
 as the city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
. I could not agree more that
this
 is a right decision; obviously, it is a possibility to improve a quality of life that citizens need.
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