In the modern world, people no longer need to use food or products from animals, such as medicine and clothing. Do you agree or disagree with that statement

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In the contemporary world

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some individuals prefer to avoid eating and wearing animal products.I partially agree with

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there is still some demands to exploit other species to for the benefit of humans. Animals contribute to a significant part of our diet.The western population

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a large portion of carnivores.Despite vegetarianism is gaining popularity

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people who eat meat are still

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is evidenced by the tonnes of meat U.S.A produces per week in order to feed their citizens.

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animals play a pivotal role in medicine.The approval of new drugs

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them to be tested on a variety of animals in-order to minimise side effects of the drugs on patients.

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newer antibiotics are injected into chimpanzee and are observed for any adverse drug reactions.

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is why other species are wanted for mankind. Despite the aforementioned reasons, the need of animals in what we wear has declined over the recent years.Awareness about animal cruelty has grown exponentially in past years.The meteoric rise of volunteers of organisations

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prime focus is to protect animals has played a vital role in the prevention of animal skin used in clothing.

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is demonstrated by affluent brands stopping the use of crocodile and ostrich skin on their handbags.

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is a major leap in protecting animals. In conclusion, the use of different species in our clothing has declined recently.

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, animals are still needed to feed humans and

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for major medical advances.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

238 words

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In the modern world, people no longer need to use food or products from animals, such as medicine and clothing. Do you agree or disagree with that statement

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