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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Other think adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

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In a different stages of human
life
, each stage has something to offer. For few groups of people, adolescent part was more fun and joyful while for others it’s adulthood, even though they have duties on their shoulders. In my opinion, to me being young was most memorable and jolly time of my
life
. In
this
 essay we will discuss both sides of the arguments and conclude my opinion. For a start, happiness differs from one to another individual and in the case of adult stage they don’t have to rely on their parents for financial support, they are entirely free from taking own decision. They are mature and are target oriented people. At
this
 point of
life
 they are socially more conscious, egoism and pride takes over. Despite having freedom
,
Accept space
,
 during mid 20s and above, people become more responsible towards their goals.
For instance
, when asked the same question to the elders of my family members, most of them recalled about their struggles during their adulthood and funny memories from their childhood.
In addition
, for some juvenile period is the golden times. Most part of the teenager's
life
 is under the guidance of parents, they are free from financial burdens. Careless attitude, full of energy and enthusiastic to learn new things are always fun. Young children don’t have much social awareness. To illustrate, as no social responsibilities they don’t have to look for a job or rent a place. Most of the time they enjoy, play and study with the same age group. To conclude, as we grow old our priority changes
.
Accept space
.
 In pursuit of happiness, at the age of adulthood people get involved with corruption and tend to become money minded. No limit to the satisfaction on the other side teenage are naïve and innocent. Undoubtedly, teenage year is the most fun and memorable.
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