Many governments think that economics progress is there most important goal some people fieber think that other type of progress are equally important for a country discuss both views and give your opinion
States have different views and ideas regarding development in the
country
, some think that the only measurement is economical but like others, I believe there are many aspects that need to be taken into consideration when we are talking about progression in society.
On the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that the development of every Use synonyms
country
is shown in its wealth and Use synonyms
people
's purchasing ability and needless to say, should be at the centre of attention for every state. Case in point, if Use synonyms
people
are not able to buy their own requirements that Use synonyms
country
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Additionally
, economic growth provides strength for the governments in terms of military, navy and aviation industries Linking Words
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country
can be self-protected in a way like many developed countries Use synonyms
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Overall
, the economy is one of the main important factors in assessing progress.
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On the other hand
, for the assessment of the states other elements Linking Words
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people
's welfare, culture and educational level are significantly effective. Suppose that a Use synonyms
country
is powerful in providing ammunition and military equipment but Use synonyms
people
are deprived of education what will be the effect of it in the long run ? Or a Use synonyms
country
which is economically progressed but still suffering from a lack of standard culture among Use synonyms
people
, how can we consider it accomplished? Use synonyms
Therefore
, given these circumstances combination of factors must be observed to evaluate it.
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although
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country
and its development, I strongly believe, a variety of factors Use synonyms
such
as culture, education and welfare must be taken into consideration as the economy in order to come to a conclusion.Linking Words
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Task Achievement
To improve your Task Achievement score, ensure you directly address all parts of the question. You discussed both views and provided your opinion, which is good; however, incorporating more specific, detailed examples to support each viewpoint could strengthen your argument and clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite