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People moving from farms to cities. However, it might cause disadvantages in cities and in farms

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Rural workers are opting to switch their lives to find work opportunities in the cities, which might trigger unwanted circumstances to the society.
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 of all, people who work at farms have a crucial function to the overall nation wellbeing.
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, our body demands various types of nutrients to perform well during daily activities and if proper food
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 as fresh meat, or vegetables fall short people would suffer from several diseases.
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, health carers
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 as doctors, nurses among other workers would
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 have to deal with people trying to improve their health. Another concern is that, farmers moving from rural areas to cities can
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 raise business awareness, because a high-rise of people from rural areas would increase employment demand as well as places to rent and live.
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, a new standard of unemployment
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 could happen and
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 affect the way population lives,
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, problems
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 as, jobless, homeless would grow along. Overall, in my opinion, farmers moving from their casual lifestyle seeking for better life in the cities could cause various unwanted circumstances to both sides. For the reason that, industries, health care systems and businesses would have to find new tools to tackle problems
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 as, jobless, homeless as well as to treat people suffering from diseases. As a solution to tackle
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 impact on the community standard, the government should create ways to help both sectors.
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, by reducing prices of essential machines and in land prices it would facilitate new purchases allowing the investor to remain where they are. What's more the reduction in prices would enhance productivity and working conditions,
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 resulting in both areas normality.
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