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some people say that educational success depends most of the time on having a good teaching, other says attitude of students also matters. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
, academic achievements most of the time rely on good lecturer, others believe that student willing play a vital factor in the success of
study
Suggestion
students
. In
this
 essay I am going to explain both views and prove that children are the core of
discipline
Suggestion
the discipline
a discipline
.
Firstly
, tutors are considered as the backbone for school as well as education process. Creative teachers can create a motivate environment for students, which will support academic success.
Moreover
,
cthe
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see the
c the
 teacher who is close to children and has a good relation with his classroom will be able to simplify the information and let students have smooth understanding, but all of the previous reasons cannot succeed without students have an eagerness to learn new subjects and committed to their school
study
 plan.
Secondly
, nowadays a lot of committees depend on online teaching as we have seen in remote learning during Covied-19 pandemic,
such
this
 situation gives us an impression that children's attitude is a crucial factor in discipline.
On the other hand
, some people believe that enthusiasm of students has a tremendous role in any academic accomplishments,
for instance
 online tuition and remote
study
 can be given by virtual classes without even teachers.
Such
 as Classiera platform which is a complete virtual material with recorded movies to explain materials,
in addition
 to supported lab and online exams.
This
 tool and other platforms are creating new methods of
study
. I have seen some examples reported in news that some children with less than 15 years were able to achieve bachelor degree and plan their master certificate. In conclusion, even though, the lecturer is still considered the backbone of learning and some people believe in them on traditional way, in my opinion students willing to achieve their educational goals are more important than teachers as proven in the above essay.
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