many doctors say that people in today's world do not do enough physical exercise what do you think are the causes of this what solutions are there to this problem?

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Life
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, as we all are living metro
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and at the same
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everyone is addicted to technology. No doubt due to
technology
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the technology
we are living comfortably in some aspects, but in
this
robotic world
indivisuals
a human being
individuals
are depending on the machinery
therefore
become lazy
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will be given
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discuss few causes and solution in
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subsequent paragraphs
a subsequent paragraph
the subsequent paragraph
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To begin
with
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humans are depending on machinery
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and in the race of earning money
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Therfore
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Therefore
, every individual is doing their jobs day and night and neglecting their health.
employees
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Employees
start their work early in the morning and finish the shift late at night as they are tired and
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owed and payable immediately or on demand
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to bound to the jobs they have to start their work early in the morning in
next
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Because
of busy schedule no one has
time
to do
exercise
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Secondly
, in the rat race no one has
time
to eat healthy food
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As there is a trend now to have lunch out by avoiding home cooked food
,
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,
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in accordance with fixed order or procedure or principle
regular
irregular
eating of junk causes
obesiy
more than average fatness
obesity
and caught by cardiac
diesease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
.
furthermore
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Furthermore
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,
we can avoid harmful cardiac diseases and other health issues
,
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,
by adapting
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
.
people
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People
should make a timetable in which they have
atleast
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at least
10 minutes to
exercise
and
also
avoid eating junk from outdoor
instead
of
this
they can take their food along from home
,
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,
there are some healthy manners like use of stairs
instead
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lifting device consisting of a platform or cage that is raised and lowered mechanically in a vertical shaft in order to move people from one floor to another in a building
elevator
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use of
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vehicles
for nearby places.
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In
conclusion,
exercise
is a need of strong and good physic we should do
exercise
in routine and
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choose and follow; as of theories, ideas, policies, strategies or plans
adopt
adapt
some healthy manners like
balanced diet
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a balanced diet
and avoiding
fries
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fried
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