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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the majority of people eat too much
junk
food
 and suffering from the
obesity
 and with others issues from fast
food
.
Nevertheless
, some people regard that
government
 should make a big tax for Hamburgers and other awful meals in
this
 way people will eat less. In my view, I strongly agree with the given
notion because
Accept comma addition
notion, because
 in the future never suffer from
junk
food
.
Firstly
, in some countries
are increasing
Suggestion
is increasing
 the index of human who suffering from
obesity
 eating too much
junk
food
.
In other words
, today people consumption too much hamburgers, fizzy drinks, and
pizza
 and in
this
 way people have a plethora of health issues.
For instance
, the young generation consuming a big amount of
junk
food
 which can be
threaten
Suggestion
threatened
 for their health and can appear
obesity
, problem or issue with a stomach.
As a result
, the
government
 should make a big tax for
pizza
, fizzy drinks, hamburger.
Secondly
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should give a command to make a huge price or tax
to
Suggestion
of
this
 kind of
junk
food
.
That is
 to say,
government
Suggestion
the government
 will support with an excellent quality of
food
Suggestion
the food
instead
 of hamburger,
pizza
, and fizzy drinks to maintain a good life for young generation.
For example
, today has a plethora of issues due to eating too much
pizza
 and hamburger
such
 kind of diabetes and
obesity
 or serious problems with a
heard
to go or travel towards
head
herd
.
Thus
, eating too much fast
food
 can be awful issues with a health or people will be very total weight. To conclude,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should impose a big high tariff on the fast
food
 industry in
this
 way people cannot afford to purchase a
hamburgers
Suggestion
hamburger
,
Accept space
,
pizza
 and human start to eat only healthy
food
.
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