Nowadays, we are surround by advertising in our daily lives. Some people believe this has a positive effect on society. Others, however, say that it is a negative development. Discuss with both views and give your own opinion.
In
this
massive and fast-paced world, consumerism has led the way people live. As consumption increases, advertisements
will make ways to make more money. Many believe that this
phenomenon has upset people in many events. Other people believe this
has more positive vibes and constructively engaging. In my opinion, sometimes ads
help us to decide a thing in a short time but rather be annoyed many times.
Firstly
, many online advertisements
sometimes place their boxes in scattered ways on the screen. In my past experience, I often accidentally clicked the ads
even if not with my intention because their ad boxes were everywhere on my screen. I were not happy with this
action because this
slowed my browsing experiments, especially when I were in a hurry. After seconds, I felt really annoyed.
Secondly
, if we talk about online advertisements
, the programmers have already set how the advertisements
work in a unique way. Google, for instance
, its machine learning will know what you are confused about to choosing a red or green dress by saving your historical browser data. Then
they will show you advertisements
(third-party) for different types of red dresses in the morning and green dresses in the evening. The aim is you will click one of the advertisements
shown and they will earn commissions from the third party. Consequently
, for this
matter, I would say this
event is useful and has a positive vibe.
In a nutshell, some ads
rarely can not be avoided. The more we surf on the internet, the more they will provide us with third-party ads
. But instead
of placing those ads
in questionable ways, they should improve their layout though. Because screen layout will increase user experience and indeed upscale the value of ads
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