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Many people think that modern day parents are more over-protective than parents from the past. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

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In today's
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world people
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world, people
 must
proctect
shield from danger, injury, destruction, or damage
protect
there
of them or themselves
their
 children from the wrong things. But in recent times parents are getting more and more overprotective than the parents in the past. There are
lot
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a lot
lots
 of things that are
happeningin
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happening in
 the
world
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.These things could negatively
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the mind of children.
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Thus it
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Thus, it
 is the job of the parents to protect their kids
for
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from
 all those harms while letting them make mistakes and learn from those mistakes. But kids can do some really dumb stuff when they have too much freedom, these things could lead
too
in the direction of
to
two
 serious problems and consequences for the future. As parents have to be
protective
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protected
 in order to provide a healthy place for their
chlidren
a young person of either sex
children
 to learn and develop, they can actually step over the boundary and
be overprotective and not know
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won't overprotective and know
didn't overprotective and know
doesn't overprotective and know
did overprotective and not know
will overprotective and not know
does overprotective and not know
have overprotective and not known
 about it. Seeing that most parents are figuring out how to handle their kids at different ages,
thus
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 they are getting into the overprotective category more often than not.
This
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 could be because they are not able to give more space to their kids at the same rate as the kids are growing or they (parents) think that it is better to overprotect their kids than to
underprotect
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 them.
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for
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For
 example, not letting their kids talk to children of other gender before a specific age, not letting their kids experience failure in life by making them avoid competitions at a small age, etc. These small things help a child to learn and adapt to as near to
world
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senario
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
scenarios
scenery
 as
possible which
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possible, which
 would in turn help them to live and strive in the real
world
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.
Hence
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, I would agree that parents are becoming more overprotective than the past.
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