A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
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Animals are thought to be overused
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and should have an equal rights as humans
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others
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however believe
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however, believe
animals should be exploited to cover different peoples need
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in my view animals can be used but by a fair
way
and
pritected
kept safe or defended from danger or injury or loss
protected
protested
by some rules and regulations. on the one hand ,As some people thinks ,Animals are extremely usefull for work and
also
for food ,it is well known that ,animals
meat
is the best source for various elements that our body needs
such
as ,brotains we can find most types of brotains in the animals
meat
like sheeps and cows ,morever milk is a very important source of calciaum to build human body specially the bones ,
furthermore
animals conributions in the work field is undeniable specially in the past as people used to transport and travell using animals like horses and camels and still now animals are used as a
way
to carry different loads like goods and take them from one place to another .
on the other hand
, other people believe animals have been exploited by people and should have more rights ,peope have been overusing animals by inhumane ways like making them work without rest and
also
not giving them the medical care they need to survive ,and by using animals
meat
more than what people actually need as of now people consume a tremendeous amount of
meat
which causes the death of more animals and to make money corporations are ready to kill every single animal in the planet . In my view
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Animals can be
used but
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used, but
governments should have a role by making some rules and regulations and
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restrict killing animals that are about to extinct that
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the way
animals can be exploited by a fair and humane
way
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conclusion
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Although
people have a various opinions in animal exploitations
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in believing
in believe
i believe
I believe
authorities should
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come between so as to be hindrance or obstacle
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and regulate
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animal
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