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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Although
 some part of society thinks that the most significant way to boost public
health
 is the introduction of more sports facilities, other strongly disagrees by saying that
this
 solution would affect little and that other steps should be involved. In my opinion, I believe that these kind of buildings should be constructed as it would considerably increase the number of people who maintain a healthy lifestyle. The
first
 reason why
sport
 centres should be built is the fact, that they would encourage society to do sports more frequently. Plenty of people use the distance between their homes and
sport
 centres as an excuse.
For example
, if they do not possess any vehicle in their movement ability is strongly limited, and
therefore
 they keep more passive rather than active life.
This
 is why these sports facilities would play
such
 a significant role, people would not have
this
 sort of excuses. What is more, doing exercises in groups is more popular, because their members motivate each other. Even if these groups are relatively small, their impact on motivation might be very meaningful.
On the other hand
, the impact of working out on public
health
 without keeping well - balanced diet is strongly limited. The people cannot forget about the importance of a food which they consume. Even if individuals work out frequently, but they eat plenty of junk food, they can still have
health
 problems. Doing exercises does not assure our proper
health
.
For instance
, despite attending gym regularly, some people might still have heart problems caused by an excessive amount of fats in their diet.
Moreover
, some part of society is not aware how significant role
sport
 plays in maintaining a healthy lifestyle.
That is
 why TV campaigns, which would emphasize the importance of doing exercises, should be introduced.
This
 would
also
 positively affects the popularity of working out. To conclude, building of
sport
 centres should take place as it has a positive impact on public
health
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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