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Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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It is true that economic progression is believed to be an important factor for the growth of a
nation
.
However
, there are many other factors
such
 as education, health
care
 and good Public
transport
 could make a county successful.
Firstly
, a good education
system
 is essential in any society, because it will produce an effective work force.
Also
,
this
 would ensure good leaders in the community.
Moreover
, when people are educated and trained by professional they are propelled to work effectively and
therefore
 contribute more to the county’s economy.
Secondly
, an establishment of a good health
care
system
 in a society. If a
nation
 could render a medical
care
, the locals may not have to save the money for their medicines and
therefore
 pay more taxes to the government. In India, one of reasons people does not pay taxes because they spent exorbitant money for medicines and clinics. If a state promises a free medical treatment for its people, indeed people will work hard towards the development of the country.
Thirdly
, a good public
transport
 network. If a
nation
 can build a
transport
system
, where people do not have to buy private vehicles, certainly it would contribute to the
nation
’s economy. Individuals would travel by public bus, trains and trams, which would result into less traffic and pollution. In conclusion, undoubtedly economic progress is significant and a country’s success is measured by its progression,
however
, there are other important factors
such
 a good education
system
, medical
care
 and effective public
transport
system
 that could make a successful
nation
.
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