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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better? You should write at least 254 words.

#cities #areas #buildings #houses #area #land
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Densely populated cities have always struggled, to fashioned the requirement as per the people. Due to rapid Urbanization, shortage of land is a huge struggle, to the
city
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 planners. In
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 essay, I will try to suggest a solution, which can be beneficial. One of the major problems occur in the cities, where municipal corporations, tried their level best to plan and try to fulfil the ever-growing needs of the citizens. A
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 like
Mumbai
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, where residents have a plethora of options to buy their dream residence,
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, most of the people can't afford to pay for an exorbitant price of the apartment.
Mumbai
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 is a
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 of dreams, but nothing comes for free. Well, there are posh areas in
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 as Peddar road, Juhu Beach and Bridge candy,
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 places are affordable by the people who are affluent. A middle-class family cannot think to purchase
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 houses.
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, due to population, builders are planning to construct towers, and which will be fancy enough, so that
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a resident
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 can afford, and it won't occupy much area,
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 will be profitable to the builder.Towers are always better in a
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 to accommodate a larger number of people. A potential solution, can be in a
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 like Goa, where land is plenty, and it is not so expensive to buy a house. People who want to buy a residence with
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 a spacious land, likely to purchase or consider the house in
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 a
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. Where per cent of the people are not highly dense, and quite feasible for the people to live. To conclude, it totally depends upon the person’s choice and their monetary budget, people looking for earning a higher salary with comfortable living in an apartment or building can choose a
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 life, whereas, those who are looking for a more comfortable life, can opt for a smaller town.
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  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
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  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
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