Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing, martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. To what extent do you agree?

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A variety of sports from individual sports like boxing, judo and
kickboxing
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to
team
correct by punishment or discipline
tame
ones has been included in big sporting events
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as
Olympic games
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the Olympic games
. According to some, sports fostering
violence including
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violence, including
martial arts should be prohibited from international sporting occasions and TV broadcast.
Although
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the origin of some of those sports dates back to old-time, I am inclined to agree with the prohibition of running
such
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international competitions as well as broadcasting to a great extent due to high risk of injury and foster the mentality of fighting.
To begin
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with, those sports involve a high level of risk and only one mistake can cost a
player
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player's
life. Despite the fact that extreme sports are beneficial to promote physical fitness as well as mental health quite similar to other sports, they usually are a combination of several sports
that
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is more likely raise
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has most likely raised
has more likely raised
more likely raises
the possibility of being injured.
For instance
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, the use of knives and swords Wushu and Kungfo, which are originally
come
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coming
from China, make them more dangerous.
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, they are far more hazardous to athletics in comparison with the other sports.
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, the promotion of violent
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
might be a serious consequence of watching those
competitions particularly
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competitions, particularly
among school children due to
skills
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the skills
and techniques that simulate real fight scenes.
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, children enjoy the natural aptitude for the imitation those of skills. If there was not a good care of them, they would injure themselves and likely their peers seriously.
Therefore
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, Tv programs regarding the martial arts should be removed from TV channels. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that removal of dangerous sports not only from big sporting
events but
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events, but
also
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from the display can be a right decision. Since
primary purpose
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the primary purpose
a primary purpose
of doing sports is to have a healthy life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • combat sports
  • glorification of violence
  • impressionable audiences
  • cultural heritage
  • self-discipline
  • sportsmanship
  • media portrayal
  • regulatory measures
  • censorship
  • psychological impact
  • broadcasting regulations
  • watershed timing
  • advocates and opponents
  • ethical considerations
  • economic implications
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