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In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 254 words

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Stereotyping in the roles of the
gender
 will not have validation in today's day. Almost every county, citizens are trying to implement
this
 culture, where equal effort and duties, should be given to irrespective of their
gender
.
Thus
, I agree with the above statement.
Firstly
, the foremost important thing is sharing equal everyday chores, will lead to better management of time and task for men and women. Fore.g., A report has published by a famous psychologist in the U.S showing that 75- 80 % of people sharing their household
work
 between them, leading
stress
Suggestion
a stress
-free, and content life.
Furthermore
, people working full- time, are capable of sharing household duties, making them better managers, and planners with good synchronization, which is an imperative quality
for
Suggestion
of
 their
work
 in the office. Apart from
this
, low chances of getting divorced or quarrels, respecting each other's job, and bearing equal financial responsibilities.
Besides
this
, If only women working at home, and after she comes from the
work
 can make her wearisome, which can make her less attentive towards her children, and other family members.
However
, we cannot be oblivious about certain drawbacks, in some cases, when talking about men & women sharing a household can lead to a mess. Fore.g., sometimes a few men who are less experienced, given home chores to do, can make things more worst, as most of the men dedicated much of their time when it comes to cleaning, washing clothes, cooking, and looking after his child's studies, so completing relying on men is not advisable.
Therefore
, it is suggested to share the
work
 respectively. To conclude, rather than giving stress to one particular
gender
I
reflexive form of "me"
myself
.E women or men, which can cause trouble in their stable lives. It is recommended to share the
work
 equally so that both the
gender
 could lead a spirit- free and organised life.
Submitted by Samiksha Singh on

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