Many offenders commit more crimes after their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be to tackle this problem?

a
Suggestion
A
large number of
ccriminal
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
criminals
have returned into the illegal path after their
first
released. There are several reasons for
this
problem, and what would be the best solution to eliminate
this
social
evils
Suggestion
evil
. It is easy to see that they will be
despised which
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despised, which
means they will have difficulty
interdrating
the action of incorporating a racial or religious group into a community
integrating
into
community
Suggestion
the community
.
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
of people are always suspicious, wary of those with criminal records due to " A leopard
can not
can not
cannot
change
his spots". Since
then
the opportunity for them to
change
come to be less than. Eventually they recommit more crimes. Relatives, their family
also
endure the same alienation.
Besides
that, it affects their employment. Incapable of receiving a job, crisis financial. Their life is
coverd
overlaid or spread or topped with or enclosed within something; sometimes used as a combining form
covered
in
dark
Suggestion
darkness
, despair, solitary. All seem to push them to the end of suffering, torment. There is nothing left to lose, they can do anything and
this
is extremely dangerous at the moment. Many policies and support come from the state,
community
Suggestion
communities
such
as assistance for vocational training, loans, job creation.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, they will have more confidence, motivation to
change
better.
Moreover that
Accept comma addition
Moreover, that
proves themselves. Communities and society should
change
stereotypes, more open to those who have
such
special circumstances. Overall, providing
job
Suggestion
jobs
, giving them respect are helpful measures to tackle the issue.
Concurrently it
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Concurrently, it
reduce
Suggestion
reduces
offence proportion.
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  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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