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It is common for people to travel long distances for work and study. Some argue that longer commute times affect people in a negative way while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, with the ever-growing population in cities, the shortage of houses in urban areas is inevitable. People have to live
further
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 away from the
city
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 where they
work
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 in order to afford housing, which results in longer commutes to
work
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.
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, the question of affordability
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 plays an increasingly large part, and so
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 debate is rather complex, as we shall see later on. Some may find the extra travel
time
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 relatively insignificant as they can afford to live in the rural areas in a lifestyle that most people can only dream of.
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, it is understandable that most suburbs can offer spacious housing with massive gardens and even a
glamourous
having an air of allure, romance and excitement
glamorous
 house, which is unaffordable for most typical
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 dwellers.
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, life in a rural area comes with plenty of rewards which go beyond materialistic considerations.
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, the abundance of natural resources
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 as land, wildlife, forestry and bodies of water, meaning the ability to breathe fresh air, hear birds singing or watch sunsets with ease. Not to mention the availability of fresh food and vegetables, and the environment uncontaminated by the pollution of sound and light, unlike in urban cities. With all these advantages, it would be justified to be willing to travel the lengthening commute
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.
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, other people may hold the notion that those in the countryside living as longer commuters would be miss out on a considerable amount of activities compared to those in the
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, especially families with children.
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, it might be said that the rural life is somewhat backwater, with fewer cultural amenities than with a
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, in the form of museums, theatres and sports events
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.
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, more extended travelling to
work
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 means that people have less free
time
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 to spend relaxing or with children, and feel more inclined to stay home
at
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on
 the weekends; social activities with friends would be significantly reduced, meaning they are more likely to feel isolated in the long run. In conclusion, whether the longer commuting
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 is problematic depends on the lifestyle people decide to have. Personally, I preferred shorter commuting times when I was young and longer commuting times when I was slightly older so I could live the lifestyle I wanted. I hope that in the future, more houses are constructed in
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 residential areas so that housing becomes less expensive, and
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 people are able to
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 make free choices for how far they have to travel to
work
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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