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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
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 have plenty of choices to pick out their
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 garments.
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, some social behaviour analysts claim that an individual's cultural background or personality can be identified by the style of clothing. Personally, I reckon the assertion is logically insufficient to draw a conclusion. The trend of globalization makes diverse
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 from different continents share the same lifestyle. In the fashion industry, several famous brands attract tremendous customers from various backgrounds cultures, and nationalities.
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, H&M, the fast fashion giant based in Spain, has opened numerous chain clothing shops on different continents.
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, there are no clear clues that can tell the cultural identity of young ladies wearing the same H&M skirts.
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, it is frequently observed that on certain occasions
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 in identical clothes with completely different educational, and professional backgrounds and even genders. Some
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 may argue that different styles of clothes reflect the owner's preferences.
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, a specific person's preferences or interests do not necessarily mean his or her cultural properties. There is no solid proof that consumers who prefer red or yellow colour tend to be open or extroverted. In fact, in the garment industry, the major classification of brands is always related to price,
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, the most important factor is whether the brands are high-end or low-end, even with the same style.
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, it is highly possible to tell an individual's wealth rather than culture from their option of clothes. There is an old saying “You cannot judge a book by its cover”, which is a lively metaphor when we are talking about the interpretation of clothing. Do not simply judge someone's culture or character by their wearing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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