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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT STUDYING HISTORY IS A WASTE OF TIME. OTHER THINK IT IS ESSENTIAL TO LEARN HISTORY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

#people #history #waste #time
Although
 some people argue that studying
history
 has nothing to offer, others opine that studying
history
 has a great prospect
for
Suggestion
of
 discovering our past and using the wisdom to shape our
future
. In my opinion, though it takes a lot of time to learn
history
, it gives us not only an insight into our culture and tradition,
also
 a sense of identity. It’s true that if you’re willing to learn your nation’s past, you should have excellent memory and spare time. Because most people memorise dates, names and facts when they study
history
 and after that these
informations
a message received and understood
information
 mostly fly away. Most of these
datas
a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn
data
dates
details
 are not useful in everyday life and or for our
future
.
Besides
, if we could actually learn from
history
, it wouldn’t be full of the same repeated mistakes.
However
, the same mistakes are made over and over which makes
history
 irrelevant to learn for the
future
 or
history
 is not well understood by the people.
On the other hand
,
history
 plays a significant role as a guide for the young people who want to comprehend their own culture.
Thus
 and
thus
,
history
 helps us understand change and
also
 it records successes and failures. If people comprehend these studies, they can learn about change and how others are affected by. The other advantage is that most of the valuable information
is found
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was found
 in the past
such
 as traditional medicines. Learning about past lifestyles and techniques used by people can hold the secrets to remedies or cures no longer used. In conclusion, while there is redundant information, people can learn many precious lessons from studying
history
. All things considered, it would be reasonable enough to conclude that studying
history
 is essential for our daily life and for our
future
.
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