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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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Some hold the view that
positive impacts
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the positive impacts
 of artificial intelligence on human life will be tangible in the foreseeable future, while others assert the idea that human beings are not ready to live in a world where computers take control of human activities. It seems to me that artificially intelligent technologies will make
great contribution
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a great contribution
 to the society. Expert and intelligent systems are able to improve the quality of human life to a great extent. Using these systems which
are heavily relied
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heavily rely
 on artificial intelligence could lead to the rise in productivity coupled with the reduction of injuries of mankind. Most decisions will be made based on data that only these systems are able to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 and thereby more efficient service will be provided to the public.
Moreover
, individuals will gradually be replaced by robots in high risky jobs, particularly those related
in
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to
 mining, deep sea research, space exploration, and saving people trapped in their homes after natural disasters as well as firefighting. Despite recent advancements in artificial intelligence, the other side of the coin, negative consequences associated with the
of
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with
 extensive use of
such
 systems, should not be underestimated. Due to widespread use of automated machines unemployment is likely to be on the rise, and
this
 may lead to individuals becoming more reluctant to learn new skills. In
such
 conditions, they might be unwillingly forced to participate in some criminal activities just to meet their basic needs. More importantly,
such
 technologies could be destructive if they are operated by criminals or misconceptions. To sum up, it is my belief that modern life more and more will benefit from the development of these systems, though they could put society at risk.
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