Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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People’s opinions differ as to whether advertising is effective to promote sales. While some people might say we do not care much about advertisements nowadays, I still believe advertising is well succeeded in promoting sales. It is undeniable that advertising is not as attractive as before when compared to years ago due to the numerous of advertisements in people’s daily life now. Businesses, from small private companies to large corporations, endeavour to advertise their goods in whatever ways they can attract
attentions
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attention
from people.
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, people get plenty of junk emails
everyday
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every day
introducing huge amounts of products no matter whether they are appropriate or not for some people.
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, those people might get fed up with these and
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blocks
these emails deliberately.
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, advertising is often criticised as misleading customers for unnecessary spending,
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as boxing day and black Friday where people purchase advertised goods far more than what they need. In despite of the arguments above, I still believe advertising is quite successful.
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, advertisements are accessible whenever and wherever they can.
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, we are
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exploring
to advertisements from
small local shop
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a small local shop
small local shops
to online websites.
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potentially motivate
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potentially motivates
us to purchase goods where they are advertised.
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, advertisements are considerably cost effective for most companies
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as airlines. Most airlines embed their advertisements in flight experiences where they are presented in magazines and screens in front of our seats for the tax-free products.
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, they
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advertise additional products to customers.
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, they might advertise comfort seats for long distance flight passengers. These advertisements promote sales successfully. In conclusion,
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some people might argue advertising does not attract much attention as before, it is still extremely successful in promoting sales from my point of view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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