Do children behave better when they are physical punished or rewarded. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

If a child is abused or rewarded both plays a huge effect on their brains in their respective manner.
Furthermore
, children always feel amazed when they receive a present.
In addition
, not saying, particularly, but child abuse is
also
a crime.
For instance
, If a frequency of the gift is more than usual,
then
the importance of it will be decreased. If they are praised or rewarded every time they do a nice thing,
then
the mental development of them will be reduced as it is psychologically proven one of the reasons for descending a person's growth is they are praised more. Because it reduces the ambition of doing more things in them with
further
leads to a reduction in the growth.
Hence
praising more is
also
not healthy.
Furthermore one
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Furthermore, one
should not judge the physical abuse without knowing the cause and particularly the extend of it.
For example
, If they have done something which is very unforgivable,
then
the parents have an authority as they have not lived to the ethics they have imparted into them.
However
, not to the extent in which it is counted as a physical brutality. To conclude, opinions vary with different human you can just make someone understand your way of looking into things to some extend despite of your willingness you can't change anyone's way of thinking.
Lastly everyone
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Lastly, everyone
feels overwhelming in receiving gifts. To reiterate everything in an appropriate amount is good or
on the other hand
, it will come with consequences.
Additionally it
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Additionally, it
is important to sometime reward a person with a praise or by giving something to make sure that their moral stays intact.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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