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The cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what action can be taken to solve this problem.

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At the present time, the world is facing a lot of problems and the biggest issue is the
traffic
problem
. The
traffic
problem
 has been dramatically increased in the urban areas around the world. When observed, there are many reasons for
such
 rises.
However
, it can be solved by taking some appropriate steps. Both, causes as well as the solutions are discussed in the ensuing paragraphs. Examining the reasons for the growing of the
traffic
 issue, the prime one is that cars have become more affordable for the average consumer and they are no long luxury item but something that most of the families expect to own. Nowadays, maximum numbers of family have their own vehicles especially cars. The other reason is that the public transportation has become increasingly unreliable in the recent years, not least because many bus and train services have been reduced because of the difficulty of
funding
the act of determining the properties of something, usually by research or calculation
finding
 them.
Therefore
, most of the individuals prefer the private transport.
Moreover
, the society has become more mobile and
this
 means more people are prepared to commute to work by car than they were before.
As a result
, the
traffic
 congestion
problem
 has risen significantly.
However
,
this
 issue can be solved by some remarkable steps.
First
 of all, the government should be improves the reliability of public transport to encourage people to take the bus and train rather than get in the car.
Therefore
, the
traffic
problem
 can be reduced to some extent.
Secondly
, it would be
also
 be to discourage people from driving to work by introducing the special fines for using private vehicles on the regular basis. A successful example of
this
 is the congestion charge scheme in the London which has certainly reduced the level of
traffic
 in inner city areas. To recapitulate, there are many different factors that have led to rising levels of
traffic
 in the world. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution, any action should probably involve encouraging greater use of public transportation and making heavy fines for motorists to drive in urban areas regularly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • congested
  • infrastructure
  • public transportation
  • economic growth
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • congestion charges
  • cycling infrastructure
  • traffic management
  • eco-friendly
  • optimization
  • alternative routes
  • commuting
  • vehicle emissions
  • mass transit
  • urban planning
  • zoning regulations
  • sustainable development
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