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Cyclists and car driver today share the same road cause some problems. what are the problems? what can be done to reduce these problems?

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There is a fact that people using bicycles and cars share the same
road
 in some areas these days.
However
, that actually provoke some serious issues.
This
 essay is going to discuss several
problem
Suggestion
problems, therefore
problems therefore
therefore
 give some reasonable measures.
First
 of all, when cyclists and car drivers arrive on the same
road
, there must be
traffic
 jam whenever it is rush hour.
Moreover
, collisions may result of
breaking transportation bus
Suggestion
the breaking transportation bus
.
For example
, it is usually observed that in Vietnam, a majority of people who ride bicycles ignore the
traffic
 lights or encroach upon the car’s lane of the street without being punished by police officers.
Therefore
, urban planners will find it difficult to come up with ideas of
road
 designs and
traffic
 signs.
In other words
, people riding bicycles feel insecure and threatened while travelling
in
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on
 the same
road
 with cars.
On the other hand
, there
is
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are
 some considerable solutions to the former issues.
First
, urban planners must work on separating lanes into bike lanes and car lanes for safety. Meanwhile, the range of fine should be increased more strongly so that people can aware of the danger of
this
 issue effects.
Finally
, education of transportation should be emphasized either schools or living neighbourhood.
For instance
,
mostly
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most
 schools nowadays focus on
educate
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educating
is educating
 about
traffic
 as a main subject by teaching one to three lessons a week. To conclude, several effects could be
risen
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rose
rise
 as cyclists and car drivers continue
share
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sharing
 the same
road
 in the future.
However
, various measures may be done to ease
this
 problem
such
 as: releasing more laws about
traffic
,
baning
a country on western coast of Africa; formerly under French control
Benin
, fining,
seperating
the state of lacking unity
separation
 lanes and educating strongly.
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