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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree?

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In recent times community is expense more on function and other activity.It is often argued that in todays scenario societies is devoted to a plenty of money to their reception. The majority of members of societies consider that high
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 marriage created a concern for a couple. I plainly disagree with
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 notion.
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 with, individual is contributing a vast number of
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 to their money on several functions including serving food, transportation and clothing. There is a plethora of reason for that.
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 and foremost, as today people have a lot of relative and friends.
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Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 have expensed a large amount of money on the foods and related activities.
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 to these, other expense
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 like renting a car or arranging a transportation for people is
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 a make higher volume in terms of monetary.
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, According to a survey of IIM Ahemdabad, More than half of spending of total
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 is about serving a cuisine to the people.
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, it is understandable that we cannot consider a newly wedded couple are not the major reason.
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, there are other
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 related to parties as well.
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such
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 as clothes and accessories which
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 contributed more than 20%.
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, high brand suits and jewellery are one of the major concerns of families. Which has a significant contribution to the total
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. To conclude, as there are several
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 are there apart from parties.
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Hence given
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Hence, given
 statement does not seem rational to me.

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