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Your company is going to organise a special training course for a few staffs. Your manager has asked you to find out if the local conference centre has the right facilities to hold this course. Write a letter to the manager of the conference centre. In your letter: give details about the course describe what equipment you will need for the course ask some further questions about the facilities at the conference centre

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about the training course that we are planning to hold in the conference centre for new employees.
This
 course would include some initial educational points about the perfect use of equipment and the necessary information to maintain them.
Also
, we want to have a quick review of the communication skills they will need
while
 they are working for us as the long hours they spend at the company.
Additionally
, I would like to announce
you
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 that there will be more than 40 applicants, so we need at least 50 seats. The other facilities we will need are a high-quality slide show and a microphone. we want to serve lunch after the conference to welcome them,
therefore
 we need some serving equipment too. Please let me know how we can manage
this
 event together and what
further
 information you need to know. Thank you for your help and support. Yours faithfully, Ostore Hasani
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task response
The letter addresses all parts of the task, but it could include more details on the specific dates and duration of the course.
coherence and cohesion
You could improve logical flow by making smoother transitions between points and using more linking words.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single point or related points. For example, keep equipment needs and the lunch arrangement in separate paragraphs.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are correctly formatted and appropriately formal.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable for a professional request.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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