You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Madam, I am writing
this
letter to share my concern about the
room
I share with one of my classmates. I have been living in
the
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room
no. 211 for a month now and it's hard to continue my stay. With ongoing practices and submissions that everybody is working on, I am unable to find my attention intact. I would like to inform you that there is a lot of disturbance in the
room
as it adjoins the sports hall, due to which I am unable to concentrate on my assignments.
Besides
, my classmate with
who
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I share my
room
is from a music department and requires constant practice and I don't seem it would be wise to request him to stop his work. It would be great if you could shift me with someone who shares similar interests as mine,
that is
linguistics or a
room
that is
a little aloof from the common halls or mess. I think
this
would assist my undivided attention
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my projects. Please let me know if
this
is feasible, if yes, I am inclined to shift at the earliest. Thank you Yours sincerely, Bhakti Patel
Submitted by Bhakti Patel on

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