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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadventages?

Some professionals believe that when
children
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 learn a new
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, it is best to learn it at primary
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 rather than secondary
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. If they do, they will be able to use it fluently, and
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 advantage far outweighs any potential disadvantages. One downside of pupils learning a foreign
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 at an early age might be that they may mix the grammar of the two languages.
Children
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 at the age of 7 or 9 study their
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 beside another one, and they will get confused about the basics of their mother tongue based on a study at Harvard about
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, I think
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 can be avoided if the teachers teach them the differences between the languages in a very clear and simple method. On the positive side, when
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 learn a new
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 at primary
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, they will be able to speak it fluently. On the opposite, if a child at the age of 16 is learning a foreign
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, they will not be able to speak it error-free or fast.
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, a professor at Cambridge University studied two groups of
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, both in primary and elementary
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, learning a new
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, and found out that the first group was able to speak the
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 instantly
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 the second group struggled and could not use it. I think
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 learning a new
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 in primary
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 could create a great advantage for society as a whole
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 because when they grow up they will be able to travel for work and do projects with different countries. In conclusion,
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children
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 might get confused about their mother tongue
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, I believe
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 downside is greatly outweighed by the upside that they will be able to communicate with it easily.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingualism
  • cognitive development
  • linguistic skills
  • pronunciation
  • accent
  • cultural awareness
  • open-mindedness
  • academic performance
  • curriculum
  • flexibility
  • natural learning abilities
  • apprehension
  • overload
  • resource allocation
  • continuity
  • fluency
  • multilingual
  • early age
  • integration
  • proficiency
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