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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society To what extent you agree or disagree with your opinion?

#punishment #death #penalty #lives #crimes #violence #control #society
Yes, It is necessary to punish criminal people to reduce violence in the country and to secure peoples' lives.But the death penalty is not the right option, all the time.As every person should have one chance to
change
 himself Without
punishment
Suggestion
punitive
 peace in the country is unobtainable. People won’t be afraid of anything and no place will be secure for good people.We will find criminals walking everywhere without any worry.So
punishment
 is necessary to create a dread. So that people with a criminal mind will think twice before creating a violent act. But rather than
punishment
 we can
also
change
 their mindset by getting them proper guidance and moral support.Every person deserves a chance to
change
 themselves
,
Accept space
,
Right? But I know there are some psychopath Who doesn’t want to
change
. All they know is to do
crime
, no lives matter to them. These psychopaths deserve
punishment
 and if they did major
crime
Accept comma addition
crime, then
then
 death penalty will be the best case to secure lives and reduce crimes.But due to political support and financial power these kind of criminals gets away with it and again be a threat to human lives. The most common reasons for crimes are anxiety, Drugs, peer pressure etc. So somehow out society is
also
 responsible for creating these criminal mindsets. So
,
Accept space
,
I think
punishment
 is not only enough to reduce
crime
. People should get proper educations
,
Accept space
,
government should
also
 organize some programs for people who are suffering from anxiety
,
Accept space
,
depression, etc..So that people will be aware of the things they are doing. If still they think same to conduct any
crime
 we have no other option
then
 death penalty. Some people have better been dead for the society.
Submitted by Chintan Patel on

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