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In many parts of the world, it is common for one parent to stay at home and raise a new born child while the other works full-time to earn money. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In several regions of the community in the globe, it is acceptable that
one
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guardian
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 should live in a house and develop a small baby while others have to do a long hour job to get their livelihood. I think there are a plethora of benefit of
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 with, in todays world where schedule is hectic and over responsibilities is there.
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 a result, both couples cannot work at a time. Which lead to
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 should have to remain at
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. There are some demerits of
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, both cannot earn the same money even though cost are same. Which lead to over burden of cost. As a
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consequence, they
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 are facing difficulties while managing their financial schedule.
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, a single person is earning while other two are making an expense even though without earning.
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 to
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, while single parents stay at
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 so in case of any sorts of emergency its make trouble to handle solely.
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, there is a plethora of advantages of
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one
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 and foremost, as
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 person always at
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 so they can make better development of their child.
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 will help their newborn babies to valuable human attachment to their families. As money not always give a sense of happiness than those attachment make. Despite
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, the
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 can understand the sense of responsibility as they take care of their babies personally.
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, if babies who were developed with other
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 rather than parents have more attachment with them
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 of the original parents. Apart from
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, those children who are studying require more attention of
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 than others. As parents cab understand in a better way to their child's potential. To conclude, it is evident that there is a plethora merit of on parents stay at
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 despite several causes that have a detrimental effect on
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 it is rational to
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 parent to live at
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