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Some people says it is impossible to live in big cities. What measure can be taken to solve this problem

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In
this
 fast paced world
,
Accept space
,
people are more concerned about their career.It has been seen that, urbanisation has become a topic of debate these days. Many people argue that, living status is not possible in the cities.
This
 essay is an attempt to figure out some causes and find out some solutions for
this
 problem with examples.
To begin
 with, supporters of the people have their own points.
First
 and foremost, overpopulation is a big threat in cities. To be elucidated, most of the people are educated. So, they access
first
 priority to their career, education and so on. Apart from that, many of the people migrate in cities that make huge differences in population.
As a result
 which makes stressful activity and
also
 badly Affect to the health conditions.
For instance
, every house made without any gap or a distance that make no privacy for the family members.
However
, there are many measures can be taken to reduce
this
 population. Government should campaign birth control program for couples and try to make more facilities in rural areas.
Secondly
, In
this
 modern world, activity is very expensive in cities.To be specified, every person tries to choose good flat, dress, good school that makes a hectic growth. Along that, people are more concentrated on how making money for the future. As it created big issues in each family budget and
also
 consumerism will be happen. Even though, use of recycling and avoid throw away culture among parents definitely control
this
 problem. To be continued, another problem is that, traffic jams are always common in urban areas.
Similarly
, people use their own vehicles that produce congestion rate and fuels.The fruitful step is that, the government should provide stringent laws against transportation. Along that, public transportation should be the
first
 option for every family. To be concluded, after analysing these aspects, there are many pros and cons in city growth.
Although
, matured and educated people can manage
this
 and it will eradicated according to the interest of each person.
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