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Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

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In
argentina
a republic in southern South America; second largest country in South America
Argentina
 the
tv
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 programs are not good at all, they only shows the private life of celebrities.
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 we do not have to generalize because there are really good programs on
tv
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, like discovery. I strongly believe that the
tv
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 can educate a lot if you find the right programs.
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 the
tv
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 has a lot of
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channel
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channels
 where you can choose from, and almost every
channel
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 has a different form to educate the viewers.
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,
nat
negation of a word or group of words
not
Nat
geo
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
go
 kids, which educate the children by cartoons.
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addition you
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addition, you
 can learn an extensive variety of things of the
world
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, because every
channel
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 educates you about different facts of the
world
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.
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, with History
channel
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 you can learn a lot about the
world
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 history.
On the other
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hand we
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hand, we
 do not
leave
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
live
 in a
first
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world
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 country, and
much
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many
 of the people that live in Argentina do not have a television, and less cable channels.Not having cable channels makes
learn
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learning
 with
tv
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 very difficult because the local transmission doesn't teach you anything. To sum up you always can learn from
tv
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 if you watch the right programs.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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