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the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in 2016 is huge. do you agree with this statement?

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These 2 pie
chart
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charts
 illustrate the differences between the
money
 was given and the
money
 was paid
of
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by
to
 a children’s charity in
USA
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the USA
 in the year 2016
Overall it
Accept comma addition
Overall, it
 is easy to be seen that the income came from lots of sources and have the total
number
 reached exactly $53,561,580 higher than $53,224,896 which was spent
About
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On
 the left
chart
, there
was
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were
 6 parts of revenue sources than
was mentioned
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were mentioned
 about: Community contributions,
program
 revenue, investment
in come
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
, government grants, other income and donate food. The largest part was
also
 the highest
number
 belonged to
donated
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donate
 food which accounted for nearly 87%.
Next
, community contributions stayed in
second
 place with 10,4% of donation for
this
 charity.
This
number
 (10.4%)
also
 5 times higher than
program
 revenue that was made up for 2,2%. Investment and government grants had the equal
number
, at 0,2%. And 0,4% remain was fit in other income Regarding to
expenditures
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expenditure
chart
, they just spent
money
 in 3 main sections:
program
 services, management and general and fundraising. The amount of
money
 paid for
second
 part had
lowest
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the lowest
number
 at 1,6%.
Next
 fundraising was at 2,6% that 1% higher than management and general. The
last
 one and
also
 tool the biggest area in
this
chart
 was
program
 services, nearly 96%
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