the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in 2016 is huge. do you agree with this statement?

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These 2 pie
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chart
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illustrate the differences between the
money
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was given and the
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was paid
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by
to
a children’s charity in
USA
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the USA
in the year 2016
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is easy to be seen that the income came from lots of sources and have the total
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reached exactly $53,561,580 higher than $53,224,896 which was spent
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On
the left
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, there
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were
6 parts of revenue sources than
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were mentioned
about: Community contributions,
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revenue, investment
in come
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
, government grants, other income and donate food. The largest part was
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the highest
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belonged to
donated
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donate
food which accounted for nearly 87%.
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, community contributions stayed in
second
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place with 10,4% of donation for
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charity.
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number
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(10.4%)
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5 times higher than
program
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revenue that was made up for 2,2%. Investment and government grants had the equal
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, at 0,2%. And 0,4% remain was fit in other income Regarding to
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expenditure
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, they just spent
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in 3 main sections:
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services, management and general and fundraising. The amount of
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paid for
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part had
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the lowest
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at 1,6%.
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fundraising was at 2,6% that 1% higher than management and general. The
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one and
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tool the biggest area in
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was
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services, nearly 96%
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