some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time.this can benefit teenagers and the community as well.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Students play an important role in the society.Children are back bone of
nation
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the nation
of their country.It is very beneficial for both teenagers and
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.If they will do
work
in their free time for community.I agree with
this
statement that students should do voluntary
work
for
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.
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.
In
next peragraph
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the next paragraph
next paragraph
next paragraphs
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss it with my point of view.
To begin
with
,
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,
there are
sevral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
pros of free
work
.
First
of all
,
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,
if youngsters will do
work
rollar
the actions and activities assigned to or required or expected of a person or group
role
and urban areas
together
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together, then
then
they can learn how do team
work
.
Secondly
,
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,
teenagers will do unpaid
work
for all people like they can make
recyling
the act of processing used or abandoned materials for use in creating new products
recycling
system.It is very beneficial for all.
Forther
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Further
Farther
more
,
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,
students have lots of
presure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
of their parents and teachers that they get
good parcentage
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a good percentage
good percentage
good percentages
in their study
,
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,
if they will
particpate
share in something
participate
participated
in voluntary
work
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work, then
then
they can know about yourself that what is good for them and what should to do.
Next
,
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,
students can learn how they can help of other people like they can
road cross
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road, cross
of old people and clean the garbage as well as they can grow new plants in parks
,
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,
on
road sides
edge of a way or road or path
roadsides
and so on. In the end
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to conclude that
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
work
is very helpful for teenagers.Teachers and parents should be
encourge
inspired with confidence
encouraged
encourage
to them for free
work
.They can learn many things while unpaid
work
.
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