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some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time.this can benefit teenagers and the community as well.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #work #time #benefit #community
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Students play an important role in the society.Children are back bone of
nation
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the nation
 of their country.It is very beneficial for both teenagers and
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.If they will do
work
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 in their free time for community.I agree with
this
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 statement that students should do voluntary
work
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 for
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.
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.
In
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next peragraph
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the next paragraph
next paragraph
next paragraphs
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss it with my point of view.
To begin
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 with
,
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,
there are
sevral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 pros of free
work
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.
First
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 of all
,
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,
if youngsters will do
work
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rollar
the actions and activities assigned to or required or expected of a person or group
role
 and urban areas
together
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together, then
then
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 they can learn how do team
work
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.
Secondly
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,
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,
teenagers will do unpaid
work
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 for all people like they can make
recyling
the act of processing used or abandoned materials for use in creating new products
recycling
 system.It is very beneficial for all.
Forther
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Further
Farther
 more
,
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,
students have lots of
presure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
 of their parents and teachers that they get
good parcentage
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a good percentage
good percentage
good percentages
 in their study
,
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,
if they will
particpate
share in something
participate
participated
 in voluntary
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work
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work, then
then
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 they can know about yourself that what is good for them and what should to do.
Next
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,
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,
students can learn how they can help of other people like they can
road cross
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road, cross
 of old people and clean the garbage as well as they can grow new plants in parks
,
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,
on
road sides
edge of a way or road or path
roadsides
 and so on. In the end
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to conclude that
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
work
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 is very helpful for teenagers.Teachers and parents should be
encourge
inspired with confidence
encouraged
encourage
 to them for free
work
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.They can learn many things while unpaid
work
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.
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