Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon

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Dear Kuntal, I hope

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letter finds you well. I am writing

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letter to thank you for your expensive gift on my birthday. I have been waiting to buy my new ear-pods for a long but I was waiting to get enough money.

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, thank you again for the best birthday present. I lost my buds

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I was on my job and doing some important work with my manager.

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will be really useful to me because I have so many upcoming meetings with my clients.

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is the top series of buds having a variety of features

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, it has background sound control

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opposite side

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voice control facilities.

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thing will be appreciated by my clients now as they were

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having issues related to my background noises.

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to that,

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sounds like a 3D voice. So, when I am stressed, I always want to hear soft romantic songs and the buds are very helpful in

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situation. Well, I have been waiting to see you again after my birthday.

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, I know you are busy with your exams but it's been a month now and we haven't talked yet. Looking forward to meeting you as soon as possible as I have so many things to share with you. Let me know when you are free to see me. Again, thank you for your lovely gift. Yours lovingly, Shreya.

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coherence cohesion

To make your letter more coherent and cohesive, try to include smoother transitions between ideas. For example, when you move from explaining how useful the present is to arranging a meeting, you could use a phrase like 'Speaking of which' to create a more seamless flow.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The paragraph explaining why the present is useful mixes several ideas together (meetings with clients, features of the buds, and personal enjoyment). You could break this into two separate paragraphs.

task achievement

You have effectively covered all parts of the task: thanking your friend, explaining the usefulness of the present, and arranging to meet up.

task achievement

The writing tone is very suitable for a friendly letter. You have naturally conveyed your gratitude and eagerness to meet up.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure of your letter is strong, making it easy for the reader to follow your points.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
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despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

240 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sincerely appreciate
generous gift
means a lot
truly grateful
thoughtfulness
perfect timing
came in handy
can't thank you enough
catch up soon
make plans to meet

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