Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon
Dear Kuntal,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing this
letter to thank you for your expensive gift on my birthday. I have been waiting to buy my new ear-pods for a long but I was waiting to get enough money.
Firstly
, thank you again for the best birthday present. I lost my buds while
I was on my job and doing some important work with my manager. This
will be really useful to me because I have so many upcoming meetings with my clients. In addition
, this
is the top series of buds having a variety of features for example
, it has background sound control as well as
opposite side
voice control facilities. Add a hyphen
opposite-side
This
thing will be appreciated by my clients now as they were also
having issues related to my background noises. In addition
to that, this
sounds like a 3D voice. So, when I am stressed, I always want to hear soft romantic songs and the buds are very helpful in this
situation.
Well, I have been waiting to see you again after my birthday. However
, I know you are busy with your exams but it's been a month now and we haven't talked yet. Looking forward to meeting you as soon as possible as I have so many things to share with you. Let me know when you are free to see me. Again, thank you for your lovely gift.
Yours lovingly,
Shreya.Submitted by parmarshreya897 on
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coherence cohesion
To make your letter more coherent and cohesive, try to include smoother transitions between ideas. For example, when you move from explaining how useful the present is to arranging a meeting, you could use a phrase like 'Speaking of which' to create a more seamless flow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The paragraph explaining why the present is useful mixes several ideas together (meetings with clients, features of the buds, and personal enjoyment). You could break this into two separate paragraphs.
task achievement
You have effectively covered all parts of the task: thanking your friend, explaining the usefulness of the present, and arranging to meet up.
task achievement
The writing tone is very suitable for a friendly letter. You have naturally conveyed your gratitude and eagerness to meet up.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your letter is strong, making it easy for the reader to follow your points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite