In today's world, majority of people are expostulate that schools are not necessary due to children's are capable to learn a massive information through internet.
In today's world,
majority
of people Correct article usage
the majority
are
expostulate that Unnecessary verb
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schools
are not necessary due to
children's
are capable Change noun form
children
to learn
a massive Change preposition
of learning
information
through Add an article
the internet
internet
. The majority of Capitalize word
Internet
the
people have an opinion that the online learning platform is more compatible than traditional Correct article usage
apply
schools
. It is inessential
to attend Replace the word
essential
schools
or universities therefore
students
can source their research and gain knowledge
through the Internet
by
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apply
that
online learning Correct determiner usage
apply
reduce
the costs of travelling, course books and human labour. Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
Internet
education
has enormous benefits to students
, conveniently accessible and traditional schools
are the crucial filter including its no exaggeration to claim most all information
disseminates on it. Students
can access to
various learning platform Change preposition
apply
such
as on
video, youTube, online articles and other interactive learning programs Change preposition
apply
therefore
the innumerable content and articles are
ubiquitous on the Correct pronoun usage
that are
Internet
does not pass an inspection thoroughly. Consequently
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Consequently,
this
can lead to false information
and sensationalised propaganda. Most of the children
and adolescent
are susceptible to what they have read Fix the agreement mistake
adolescents
via
online as they might be less sceptical and lack Change preposition
apply
of
discretion. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, teachers
can encapsulate the knowledge
from textbooks and instil Correct pronoun usage
it to
to
the Change preposition
in
students
The schools
materials and textbooks are written by well-regarded academic authors and thoroughly researched so as Change to a genitive case
school's
schools'
the
result the Correct article usage
a
students
would get reliable and precise information
and education
. Traditional schools
and universities help students
to maintain a
good discipline and behaviour as Correct article usage
apply
teachers
are closely monitoring the students
’ performances and academic results. As well as
observing and assisting the students
to have a
decent value and proper guidance from Correct article usage
apply
teachers
thus
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apply
the
artificial intelligence cannot substitute well-educated Correct article usage
apply
teachers
. The Attend
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attending
students
tend to have well
- behaved, self-discipline and Verb problem
be
responsibility
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responsible
due to
the supervision of teachers
including the regulate
of Replace the word
regulation
students
’ conduct, therefore
students
tend to have
more concentrate on their studies as they can not be distracted by the lure of the Verb problem
focus
Internet
during reading or studying at school. Moreover
, studying in schools
enhances children
's on
social Change preposition
apply
skill
as they can interact with their peers and gain more experiences in social life. Fix the agreement mistake
skills
Children
can learn rapidly and master in various studies such
as writing and speaking from another
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another student
other students
students
. Schools
also
encourage and provide numerous activities for students
to participate and those activities not only ameliorate their physical but also
mentally
. Change the word
mental
Students
can learn about teamwork, communication and socialising, these implement
would help to improve student lives and careers in the future Replace the word
implementations
while
online education
could not provide these learning skills due to
limited extent. As
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In
a
conclusion the rapid Correct article usage
apply
technology
advancement and Replace the word
technological
the
easy access Correct article usage
apply
through
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to
internet
sources. Students
can conveniently access to
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apply
knowledge
and accessible information
. Online courses allow students
to study with flexible time and at preferable timing
. Fix the agreement mistake
times
Hence
this
new approach could be assisting for traditional school education
but can not be replace
. Change the verb form
be replaced
Schools
and university
are still imperative and vital Fix the agreement mistake
universities
education
system
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systems
,.
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,
.
Teachers
are still playing a significant role in providing knowledge
and support to the students
thus
schools
are more effective than online education
. Overall
, its
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it is
necessaries
for Replace the word
necessary
students
to attend school, universities or their classes and at the same time,gaining
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gain
knowledge
through the Internet
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