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nowadays people are not fit and active as before. these will have negative effect in the future health. what are the reasons and solution to this issue.

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The ever increasing advancement and sophisticated technology has had a huge impact on our lifestyle. Today, automation in our life has a
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 of benefits, but at the same time it proposes some serious drawbacks, which has a grievous effect on our future
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. People today are more obese and are becoming more passive in their routine. There are a
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 of reasons, credited to the rising figure of overweight individuals in our society. The most prevalent cause is that humans today exercise less and eat food
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 loaded with fatty acids, ultimately leading to various
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 diseases, like diabetes and high blood pressure.
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, it has been observed that the average
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 of days in which school children exercise is only two days per week,
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 they are made to focus more on studies and academic activities. If the high
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 of obesity continues to increase,
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 the future
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 of the present generation is at stake. The children in school must be well informed and enlightened about the importance of
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. The sports head must organise activities in which students can participate regularly, in order to make them in the habit of living an active life throughout their livelihood.
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, parents can
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 support their children to be more active and fit, by setting a role model themselves.
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, in conclusion,
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 era had witnessed a high
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 of
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 problems, particularly due to obesity and
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 the intake of low nutritional value food items. Strict and immediate measures must be taken in order to secure the future of our
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.
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