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Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve the environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles

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With the boost development of the world, the growing greenhouse gas emission has led to the environmental problems become tricky. Several people believe that increasing the charge for
fuels
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fuel
 cars and other vehicles is one of the best ways to settle the environmental problems.
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, I absolutely disagree with
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 view.
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 with, there are many kinds of the environmental problems and fuels is unlikely the most serious abuse sources of environmental problems. There are
also
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 amounts of
pollution
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,
such
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 as noise
pollution
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,
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,
light
pollution
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 and three
waste
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pollution which
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pollution, which
 includes
waste
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 gas
pollution
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,
waste
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 water
pollution
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 and
waste
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 residue
pollution
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 caused by urbanization and agriculture.
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Although
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Despite
 increasing costs can release the adverse impact from fuels which used by cars and vehicles in a short term, there still has anther way to avoid environmental problems.
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, the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles is a heavy burden which could not be estimated precisely. The more extend be
polluted
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polluting
 the more capital is supposed to be invested. Even several developed countries could afford the expenditure, there are a large number of developing countries’ citizens who are suffering from the lack of primary needs, like hunger or disease. In general, I strongly believe that increasing the expenditure turns to new energy resources could be better than the cost of fuels for cars or other vehicles to solve the environmental problems. Fuels will be used up ultimately as the non-renewable resource. And there has a thrive tendency that the market is turning to electric cars rather than the traditional oil-fuelled automotive, which is eco-friendly does not produce the greenhouse gases.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental preservation
  • Sustainable transportation
  • Green technologies
  • Alternative energy sources
  • Renewable energy
  • Fuel-efficient vehicles
  • Electric vehicles (EVs)
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic impact
  • Consumer behavior
  • Disproportionate effect
  • Government subsidies
  • Comprehensive policies
  • Cost-effective solutions
  • Carbon footprint reduction
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