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Plastic shopping bags contributie to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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Now a day, pollution is one major issue that we all talk about. To a far extend the increased usage of
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 containers and carriers has led us into
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 situation. I strongly agree to
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 fact that it is a key reason for many of the problems we face in land and in marine life so it is to be banned.
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 and foremost, proper disposing of used
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 materials is not done in any of our surroundings. Even though our government has taken the initiative by arranging waste boxes in our locality, people are so lazy to practice good habits. Since the wastage is thrown out here and there and
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 contaminate
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 and soil. It affects the growth of plants and living things around us, one of the main reasons for mosquitoes in cities are because of rain
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 that holds in these
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 garbages that are not systematically taken care.
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 you consider our
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 bodies around us, many of us are putting used cans and bottles into it. We are not worried about the consequences. Piling up of these things that we throughout can even block the flow of
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, even we have heard in news that dolphins die because of eating
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 disposals in
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. Discovery of
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 has changed our lifestyle in many ways. But more than that it is now something that has to be stopped. It can be controlled somehow by imposing heavy penalty on violators. In conclusion, it is good to ban
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 in our society. We have to plan now itself for the betterment of our future generations. A healthy alternate has to be introduced
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.
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, people will not be tended to use it anymore.
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